A Human Girl Came To An Alien School And Everything Changed! | HFY | A Short Sci-Fi Story

Second day of school, finds ancient artefact that holds a star map to an unknown location. Just your average day at space school 😂

10:48 Now, why would a mysterious figure come up to Nora, and give her warnings about finding the object when she has had no contact with it since it was found, and likely never will again? Why again, is she acting like they are going to be the ones doing the diging for more objects and studing the one they found. If it were so valuable, the school, but more likely a government agency would be tearing up that area in no time, and the object would be in a secure location long ago.

This kind of thing where ancient relic with links from the past to the present could work back even in our own history. Imagine a cache being discovered from pre-gallic sack of Rome someone just before the end of the republic. Showing the truth - the long lost truth that could unravel Octavian’s plans of imperium.

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The "proofreading" is a bit lacking, the text could use some editing and using quotations when the characters talk, also the tone of Nora's voice is used when other characters speak.

I like the ideas in this story. You've got a group of what sounds like fleshed out characters in your mind, but they aren't fleshed out in the story. I think it sounds like the characters should be graduate or post grad students. By aging them up it makes the later happenings in the story more believable. You need to develop the part about the different groups who are against them. You also need to make the conflict the fight and the escape more tension building. I'd also suggest spending a bit more time on the political conflict, this could be done easily since the parent(s) are diplomates. Don't make everything happen so fast slow things down and build tension. You might include some bits about the history of the school and why that relic might have been there. The story has lots of potential keep going, I want to see more adventures in this universe.

This could make a good direct-to-tv film. Assuming Disney doesn't mess it up trying to be cool,

Nice outline but the story is lacking substance.

Yeah, so kids have a say about the relic? Nope, they only had a chance to watch through a window as techs did work. Now kids who have a few weeks at school are computer archeologists. What shit.

O. I want to access strange things too. advanced labs and xray glasses too. LOL!

Can't help but notice that the aliens in the art work all seem to be mammals and bipedal. We have no reason to believe this could be a standard.

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I love how you put together this video. The dialogue seems nice and interesting to hear. You did a good job keep it up.

truly fiction, different cultures and ideologies working together, and coalescing without all out war?

Then having eaten beans and deviled eggs the night before Nora let a big one rip taking out her pursuers leaving questions of biological and chemical war fare crimes,

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Good day everyone. This video tells us more then just a story. this, when applied in the world, would bring us not only closer together, but give us a sense of belonging. despite how differant we are, we are all part of the future

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Yawn...

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